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Fiction: The Dark Tower |
Posted by
Dark_Illusion on Sunday, June 05, 2005 - 12:21 AM PST
Now As I walk alone In this Darkness that has comforted me these many years But there was a time when I was as high as the mountain, A tower I built filled with the light of the world. The bricks made of happiness, pillars of hope and floor after floor of love.
But I noticed a gliched in this creation. I found a flaw in the flawless. So this perfect joy wasn’t so perfect. I found that all the light was blocking me out. I built this so called perfect tower of light now you can watch it as it consumes me and devours me into imperfect light.
So I ask myself whats the difference between the light and Darkness?Both will block u out anyways left with noone to see you. So me how I decided to be in was the Darkness. So now my Tower,……My Castle……. Turned upside down.
Now clouds…. Yes THUNDER CLOUDS!!!!!!!!!!They SURROUND THIS ONCE PERFECT SUNNY DAYTOWER .
Now its filled with cold, damp darkness, with bricks of lies, pillars of deception and floor after floor of pain and anger. This tower, my castle is now biuilt with all the sins of the world. Now I shall not see light for darkness has over powered it. With all the evil that dwells in the world. They!!
Yes the evil shall return to my tower, my castle and then I shall build my Throne of Darkness. Through darkness’s faith I shall blanket this world with has done to me. When I’m done They’ll be praying darkness’s grace for theytoo will be dead to the world a peace for my own,
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Re: The Dark Tower
by Merry_Widow on Jun 05, 2005 - 12:54 PM
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No. Just, no. Mostly no to that THUNDER CLOUDS (insert excessive punctuation here) crap in the middle.
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Re: The Dark Tower by Merry_Widow on Jun 05, 2005 - 12:57 PM (User info | Send a Message) http://http:// | I just realized it is "The Dark Tower" written by "Dark_Illusion." Dark, dark, dark. Darkity dark darkdarkdark. Darkdarkdorkitydark dark dark. I have a night light for you if you want it. |
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Re: The Dark Tower
by Kira (mod_complex-at-hotmail.com)
on Jun 07, 2005 - 07:45 AM
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I think building a Hot Tub of Darkness in my castle has a higher priority than a Throne of Darkness.
Or what about a Breakfast Nook of Darkness? Or an Evil Walk-In Closet of Darkness? Do bricks of lies hold up as well as bricks of....uh...brick? I hear Pergo is a nice, cheaper alternative to floors of pain these days.
Will I need a Castle Equity Line of Credit of Darkness for this kind of remodeling?
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Re: The Dark Tower by Tiresias (tiresias43athotmaildotcom) on Jun 16, 2005 - 09:36 PM (User info | Send a Message) | You'd better hit it up quick...I hear The Dark is Rising. Evil will only be available at 3.5% for so long. |
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Re: The Dark Tower
by bettie_x (strangersangel@hotmail.com)
on Jun 10, 2005 - 11:19 PM
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Can you get darker darkness by reiterating darkness times infinity? Black is out, but blacker darkness is TOTALLY in. I'm going to go ponder on my porcelain throne of darkness, for I had much bbq of darkness today.
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Re: The Dark Tower by Merry_Widow on Jun 11, 2005 - 02:42 PM (User info | Send a Message) http://http:// | Just make sure you give the darkness a good couple of dark flushes, else backed up darkness will haunt you. Darkly. |
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Re: The Dark Tower
by Tiresias (tiresias43athotmaildotcom)
on Jun 16, 2005 - 09:33 PM
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Sweet jesus...learn to proofread. I don't think nouns are supposed to have a past tense. This reads like something written by an automated "goth literature" generator. And I think the title "Dark Tower" was already snagged by Stephen King. Do not pass go, do not collect $200. Bad kitty!
Try again?
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Re: The Dark Tower by EricaLinn (Skylinn_02@yahoo.com) on Aug 09, 2005 - 06:58 AM (User info | Send a Message) | I'm sorry, but I am forced to agree. I don't like judging peoples work because you did make a crack at it, but it needs something.......Ah yes, to be completely rewritten into a totally different story. Sorry fella. Better luck next time. Don't give up though. Everything takes practice. |
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