A good experiment would be to switch the POV to first person. It could work, it could bomb, but writing is just one of those on-going processes. Lots of trial and error go into a good piece.
Re: Footsteps by Domkitten on Oct 21, 2004 - 03:01 PM
Re: Footsteps by Merry_Widow on Oct 21, 2004 - 07:30 PM
Re: Footsteps by Domkitten on Oct 21, 2004 - 07:47 PM