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Re: Once Bitten
by daria_4 (-)
on Nov 30, 2003 - 02:02 AM
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Thanks Domkitten. I tend to be very open about what I want/expect/need in the bedroom as well as in my general relationships... Sometimes though, I tend to miss the things that are right in front of me.
While I did need to hear what you just told me, overall I was writing this piece more for the exercise of writing than anything else. And looking at it--now that it has posted, I don't think it was ready for viewing.
I'm the one who wrote it, but as a reader, I feel like there's not a steady flow. I understand the general premise, but the pauses only come naturally to me because I am also the author. I wouldn't make it much more wordy, but I still feel like there's something missing--can't put my finger on it, though.
Thoughts?
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