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Re: Revision
by Meranda_Jade (Meranda@mymind.com)
on Jul 13, 2003 - 07:47 AM
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Where are you getting Brookland? It says Brooklyn, which is in New York. As far as aristocracy in Victorian New York goes, watch the movie "The Age of Innocence". It's based on a true story, and as far as I know is historically accurate. I've read enough Victorian novels and watched enough movies based on the time period to know the meaning of the term "lover" as it was back then. One of my favorite time periods, actually. I do know that especially in the lower classes, virginity wasn't taken as seriously as in the upper classes, and the middle classes tried to emulate the upper classes, thus I suspect the daughter in the story was a virgin, as it was stated. Instead of picking on the historical accurracy, or whether or not a word was used in context, let's keep things where they were in the beginning. Punctuation, grammar, flowery word usage (which I still insist belongs in a story of this nature). Once the punctuation and grammar was cleaned up, it turned out to be a nice story. All I did was edit it. I did not rewrite it, as the person who tried before did. It kept the author's original flavor of the story. Sure, it needs work. It was probably written by a young person, who needs to get a punctuation/grammar guide, or a writing guide. I've actually read things that got posted that gave me headaches from bad tense usage, that were no better than this before it got edited. I don't mean in the mulit-posts, either. I'm not attacking anyone here, I just think this one wasn't all that bad, and I personally have nothing against someone writing with a style that includes flowery speech, if the style of the story demands it.
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