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Re: Revision
by Meranda_Jade (Meranda@mymind.com)
on Jul 12, 2003 - 02:12 PM
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Now, what I think the author meant to tell in this story:
There is a woman, a servant of a dead aristocrat, standing at his grave. As she worked for him, she saw many of his horrible deeds, and had some contempt for him. He knew she was contemptuous of him, and it made him angry. He went to her living quarters where she lived with her daughter. He sought to take his revenge on the woman by assaulting her daughter. One day, she saw him get his just reward from a man he was having shady dealings with. She goes once a year to gloat over his grave.
It makes sense. The story could use some development, and if worked with some more, could made longer with more detail. I think it's a good story in the making.
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